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It happens
in every town of America
The kid who thought he had friends
but serectly knows he's dead wrong
Metal is his passion
Iron Man his anthem
raised in a 'perfect home'
can't wait to get on his own

The backlash is catestrophic
from the abuse he silently take
To him it is basic
vengence must be taken
and thus we have Columbine
and others like it
His cries for help is heard
through the cries of his victims

Given every chance
resorting to this
no one knew his dance
or why he did the deed
a series of events
led to his demise
following the footsteps of Iron Man
he had his revenge
©2007-2009 ~omertascoped
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This is my favorite poem, and i wrote it exactly one month before Virginia Tech shootings.
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your poetry is.. somewhat young, but very talented. I especially like this one and the one you just posted. I would reconsider the final two lines of this poem though, rhythmically it is not fluid, try reading it out loud and I think you will see what I mean. Let me know if you would like me to edit more of your poems. Peace

It happens
in every town of America
The kid who thought he had friends
but secretly knows he's dead wrong
Metal is his passion
Iron Man his anthem
raised in a ';perfect home'
can't wait to get on his own

The backlash is catastrophic
from the abuse he silently takes
To him it is basic
vengeance must be taken
and thus we have Columbine
and others like it
His cries for help are heard
through the cries of his victims

Given every chance
resorting to this
no one knew his dance
or why he did the deed
a series of events
led to his demise
following the footsteps of Iron Man
he had his revenge
my main reason for including "Iron Man" by Black Sabbath was it was what i was listening to, punching my walls to, ect. but i dee what you mean, it just doesn't seem to fit as well as the rest

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"We steal from beggars and ask for understanding,
We lie, rape, steal and murder to make tonights headlines

Trust the system,
Make your contribution,
Smile, applaud, love, hail.
The weaker you get the stronger they become"
In Flames-"Vacuum"
it's a great song too, I don't mean that you might want to reevaluate those lines in content, but in rythm. Try playing around with the words a bit until they sound right.

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